Should we do not use Torrent?
201102473 Seho Lee
Internet download system has been developed since internet network was born. At first, it seemed not a problem to download some pictures or songs through the internet because there were few people who could do it. However as the personal computer became popular and the general public got ability to use their computer well, the contents people download were rapidly increased so government put some regulation on the download system but still it is hard to limit the boundary of free of downloading for the users.
Most people agree that it is illegal to get someone else's creative production with no pay. It is unquestionably right opinion and intellectual property right must be protected.
In some cases, however, the internet downloading is become opportunity for some people. There are some people who want to upload their work on internet so many people can watch it and download because they want to raise their profile.
Also the downloading programs like p2p or torrent are easy to use and there are many lawful productions distributed by these simple and convenient programs.
So I think if the operators of downloading programs and producers of creative works are cooperate and governments regulate some illegal heavy uploader properly the consumer can take high quality works through very convenient high technology systems legally.
it is my first draft so I didn't write detail supporting sentences yet. if you have good idea for this, please comment it. It will be lots of help for me. thanks!
ReplyDeleteEdward Yom
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Does the essay have five paragraphs? Yes
Does the essay have a thesis statement that identifies the writer’s point of view? It sort of hints at the main idea, but it is a little vague.
Do the body paragraphs include topic sentences that support the writer’s position? Yes
Does the third body paragraph contain a counter-argument with either a refutation or a concession? No
Do the details in the body paragraphs support reasons stated in the topic sentence? Yes, it kind of does.
Does the conclusion restate the thesis in different words, make a prediction, or state the issue in a broader context? No
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1. Do you have a thesis statement that takes a clear position? Kind of.
Do the body paragraphs include distinct reasons to support your position? No
Does the third body paragraph contain a counter-argument with either a refutation or a concession? Kind of, yes.
Did you use connectors that show contrast or addition? Yes
Did you use any noun clauses? No
Did you use any adverbial clauses? No
Does your conclusion repeat the reasons in your argument? No